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In one double-blind, randomized, placebo-controlled study, patients were given a daily dose of 40 or 120 mg ziprasidone or placebo for 28 days in 132 patients ( 136). There was a statistically significant improvement in psychotic symptoms versus placebo in the 120 mg/day ziprasidone group as measured by the total BPRS and the CGI scores. Evaluations for parkinsonian symptoms, akathisia, abnormal movements, and sedation did not reveal any notable treatment effects. No significant differences existed between drug and placebo in the total number of adverse events, laboratory test abnormalities, or more serious adverse events. Thus, this study documented that 60 mg ziprasidone twice daily was an effective strategy with negligible risks. 

Scoring evaluation The student has a strong opinion on this issue and makes his or her points quite clear in an introduction, body, and conclusion format. Vocabulary use is very strong, and the use of the Maslow example ties in powerfully with the message in the essay. His or her personal examples also make each point stronger, and spelling and grammar are all error-free. 

Scoring evaluation There is a sincere attempt to answer the question here, but it gets lost somewhere along the way (perhaps in between all of those my opinion remarks). There is very little support for any points the student tries to make, and there are a number of fragments and usage errors. 

Scoring evaluation There are some things that could be used as a theme here, but the student drops them without any development. An opinion is listed but not supported, and then the student veered off topic completely. 

Scoring evaluation There is virtually nothing to redeem this essay other than the student did answer the test question. There are multiple errors that make it very hard to understand. 

Scoring evaluation This is a simple, but well-done essay. Although there are no profound vocabulary words and the sentence structure is fairly typical, the student does a great job of linking her personal experience with answering the question. The support is clear and understandable, and the format of introduction, body, and conclusion is very strong. 

Scoring evaluation This is another strong essay, although it tends to ramble a little bit more than it should. The grammar and spelling are excellent, and the personal illustration supports the original test question. The three parts (introduction, body, and conclusion) are easy to see, and the sentence structure has good variety. 

Scoring evaluation This essay has some really good points. The example used to support the student s opinion is vivid and relevant. There is a definite introduction, body, and conclusion to the essay. The biggest flaws are lack of sentence variety and too much repetition. 

Scoring evaluation This student answers the question and provides a personal experience example for support. A portion of the example is completely off topic, which hurts the essay as a whole. He also has verb tense and agreement errors, as well as spelling issues. 

Scoring evaluation The student does answer the question in a way, and yet, it is lost amid the errors and the rambling about other things that do not tie to the main question. Although an introduction and body are primarily missing, he or she does try to put in a conclusion, although in a wordy and unnecessary way. 

Scoring evaluation As with most low scoring essays, this one is so riddled with errors that it is difficult to read. There are incomplete sentences, spelling errors, verb tense errors, and slang. There is no sense of organization and no examples to support an opinion. 

Scoring evaluation Although this is a shorter essay, it is still very strong. The conclusion makes an obvious connection back to the introduction and the quote. The grammar, sentence structure, and vocabulary are all strong. 

Scoring evaluation This student is trying to answer the question and does provide some supporting examples from his or her perspective. There is not much sentence variety and no outstanding vocabulary, but there is a semblance of an introduction, body, and conclusion. 

Scoring evaluation This student definitely has an opinion on the matter and does use a little personal experience to support it however, that is about the only thing done correctly. There are incomplete sentences misspellings and no sense of introduction, body, or conclusion. 

Scoring evaluation There is an attempt to answer the question here, but there is little else that is good to say about it. The student fills up space by repeating unnecessary information. There is virtually nothing to support his or her opinion and no sense of introduction, body, or paragraph. 

Scoring evaluation The student actually did partially answer the question, but goes off topic, has no support or examples, and has no organization whatsoever. 

Scoring evaluation This essay perfectly shows how a student can answer a question using a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, with relevant examples and personal experiences. Grammar, spelling, and vocabulary are excellent with strong sentence variety. Note how well the student maintained the right pronouns (we/us) throughout the essay. 

Scoring evaluation This is another strong essay with a great tie in between the introduction and conclusion. It has relevant examples from history, as well as from personal experience. This essay uses a little more repetition than it should and sentence variety could be improved a little, but otherwise an excellent example of how to write an essay. 

Scoring evaluation This student has a very valid point. He or she disagrees that the quote applies to humans (remember that you are NOT scored on if you agree or disagree) and has some relevant support in the examples used. There are some spelling and grammatical errors and a lot of repetition/wordiness. There are some problems with pronoun shifting and verb tense issues as well. 

Scoring evaluation Although there is an attempt to answer the question here, it rambles quite a bit and has a number of errors in it. There is no real insight into the question and too much slang or informal language. The organization is very loose, and there is a lot of repetition. 

Scoring evaluation The student is responding to the question without any clear opinion, supporting examples, or a sense of organization. He or she misses the objective of answering the essay prompt with his or her own opinion, which is evident in the don t know and don t understand statements. In the second paragraph, the student veers off topic completely. 

Scoring evaluation The student clearly does not get the point of the quote and is unable to write anything in the essay. There are too many mistakes to be able to read it, no examples, and no organization. 

Scoring evaluation This student clearly responds to the test question and does it in a clear, organized fashion. Sentence variety is excellent as is use of vocabulary. His or her personal experiences relate directly to the topic and are given with strong supporting details. He or she definitely provided personal insight into the issue in a very strong essay. 

Scoring evaluation This student takes a completely different perspective on the question but responds very well with relevant personal examples and good organization. There is some repetitive sentence structure and vocabulary, but for the most part, this is a strong and well-done essay. 

Scoring evaluation The student has pretty much missed the whole point of this quote. His or her response is so hard to read because of the errors that the essay could not possibly get more than a 1. There are spelling errors, grammar errors, off-topic responses, and absolutely no sense of organization or supporting examples. 

Scoring evaluation Although the student has a strong viewpoint and supports it with relevant examples, the vocabulary is weaker here, with a lot of repetition. Sentence variety is limited, and there are several grammar and usage errors. It is also on the short side, coming in at just about 250 words when the ideal is 350 to 450. 

Scoring evaluation This essay tends to use choppier sentences and overly informal, slang terms. It is far too short, and there are some basic errors like word choice (accept except and except expect). The vocabulary is limited, and there is little to no insight into the question that was asked. 

Scoring evaluation Although this student made an effort to fill up the lines, there are many errors in the essay, including spelling. There is no sentence variety, and most of the essay tends to stray off topic. 

Scoring evaluation There is little right in this essay. 

Scoring evaluation This essay does it all It has sentence variety powerful and relevant examples a clear (and grabbing ) introduction, body, and conclusion and an excellent use of vocabulary. The student even looks briefly at the opposite side of the issue and shows why it is understandable, but not logical. 

Scoring evaluation This student gives it a good try, but falls short in several areas. There is a lot of repetition, and the examples cited do not sufficiently support his viewpoint. There are some grammar errors (fragments, etc.), and the essay shifts pronouns often, from they and people to me and us. It is also too short. 

Scoring evaluation The student tried hard to fill out all of the lines, but in doing so, used choppy sentences and a great deal of repetition, plus the writer waffles on viewpoint (from negative to positive and vice versa). There is little vocabulary development and very little insight into the actual question. 

Scoring evaluation This essay takes a lot of space to say virtually nothing. There are spelling errors, as well as word choice close/clothes). There are no supporting examples of any kind. 

Scoring evaluation Besides being too short, repetitive, and not answering the actual essay question, this essay is almost incomprehensible. 

Scoring evaluation This student uses such strong examples that his or her essay is quite persuasive. There is a clear introduction, body, and conclusion and a great use of sentence variety and vocabulary. Since it is free of any grammatical, usage, or spelling errors as well, it is clear why this essay would score a 6. 

Scoring evaluation This essay is an example of a student who wrote on a somewhat unfamiliar topic (he or she is not a sports fan) but in a convincing and logical manner. It has great vocabulary good examples and a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Although the writer would benefit from not qualifying some of... 

Scoring evaluation There is a lot of rambling in this essay. When you add in spelling errors, repetition, little sentence variety, and grammar mistakes, you can see why this would only earn a 4. 

Scoring evaluation This essay sounds like a phone conversation between two friends, rather than an essay that is supposed to have an introduction, body, and conclusion with supporting examples. It strays from the main topic and is too informal for the assignment. 

Scoring evaluation This essay attempts to answer the question but gets completely bogged down in fragments, misspelled words, and irrelevant examples. 

Scoring evaluation Like other essays that only score a 1 on the SAT, this one is almost incomprehensible due to errors. It is not clear what the student is attempting to say, and the essay is too full of flaws to make any sense. 

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