Vocabulary viewpoints

It is useful to establish a central package of shared basic definitions that are known throughout the business—the vocabulary the staff use in their work. The viewpoint packages can import this package. Like our earlier Network package, it tends to be a mostly static model (types and attributes). 

Scoring evaluation Although the student has a strong viewpoint and supports it with relevant examples, the vocabulary is weaker here, with a lot of repetition. Sentence variety is limited, and there are several grammar and usage errors. It is also on the short side, coming in at just about 250 words when the ideal is 350 to 450. 

Scoring evaluation The student tried hard to fill out all of the lines, but in doing so, used choppy sentences and a great deal of repetition, plus the writer waffles on viewpoint (from negative to positive and vice versa). There is little vocabulary development and very little insight into the actual question. 

The apparently superficial differences in vocabulary in this exchange may reflect deeper assumptions about language and safety. Miners locate themselves in relation to physical objects, events, and conditions. Investigators locate these same objects, events, and conditions as two-dimensional coordinates on a mine map. Miners describe themselves in relation to the bleeder line. Investigators call the section the number one entry of the first left section. Miners say timber. Investigators say post. These differences reflect underlying differences in viewpoint that reflect deeper assumptions about risk and safety. The bleeder describes a critical component of the mine s ventilation system. The first left section describes the section in relation to the mine s plan of development. The number of the section reveals little about the ventilation system. As a result, it tells us little about the potential hazard or benefit of a particular location in a crisis. In a fire, for example, miners could use the direction of air flow in the bleeder to help them locate an exit. 

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